tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5325073457822952759.post612263732478775417..comments2023-10-05T01:53:51.098+13:00Comments on Hazel: The Abandoned SchoolPt England Blogs Administrator 2014Bhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07845137228130364482noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5325073457822952759.post-51263704035380216742018-07-01T17:50:28.461+12:002018-07-01T17:50:28.461+12:00Hi Hazel ,
I really like the descriptive words yo...Hi Hazel ,<br /><br />I really like the descriptive words you have used in your story ,<br />I also would use that title because it connects to the story ,<br />Maybe next time you could check your punctuation and to put the capital and non capital letters in the right place.<br /><br />Good workAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5325073457822952759.post-26900555680245416922018-05-02T18:57:27.059+12:002018-05-02T18:57:27.059+12:00Hi Hazel,
What a wonderful quick write! You have ...Hi Hazel,<br /><br />What a wonderful quick write! You have managed to get four of the target words in your writing and you have had some really wonderful ideas. If this was an extended writing lesson we would edit this, but because it is a quick write we leave it at it's first draft. Remember grave means something is very serious and often bad, but you used it well when you described the mistake the students made in visiting the school. Was it Pt England by any chance? :ODanni Stonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06470833379829179523noreply@blogger.com